Evolution ♥️ Part 2

 

Well paced and beautifully structured!

Okay. Thoroughly aroused and alone.Who would blame me? ...But first; onto part 2...

 

Jim was very hospitable sharing Liz with Mark, and all 3 had a wonderful time.

 

Very well written. The story was sexy but writing skills are just as sexy to me.

 

Great story. Im looking forward to reading more from you

 

That was excellent,

 

Seriously good story. You write very well. Thoroughly enjoyed it. Thank you.

 

How did i miss your musing?!
You've gone from villainous to something else now ... must find new word ::searching dictionary:: ... excuse me, this might take a while

 

EVOLUTION was great to read! I'm sure you can visualize what it did to certain parts of my body! I hope E-2 is just as sensuous!

 

Thanks everyone!

 

Great Story Cherrypop. This is the first that I have read and after listening to Wicked kitten, all i can picture is you in that story and also almost here your voice reading it as well. Are they the only stories you have wrote? Wicked Kitten & Evolution (1&2)?

 

@torrt105 Read this and the sequel. Utter masterpieces! Great for creating incredible ideas and mental images too!

 

I just saw this! Thank you! ♥️♥️♥️♥️

 

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Love this quote

 

the truth once again I just read evolution and evolution 2 and waooooooo what delicious stories are so perfectly detailed that it is inevitable to imagine and you can even feel so much pleasure that you felt @Cherrypop, also with your magic in writing you do that when you are reading Hundreds a great excitement accompanied by a huge erection and feel as if you were one of the two lucky men.

 

I still love this first line. But now that I've reached the end of the story, I am left with mixed feelings to sort. I've actually read your story several times now.

The first time I read it, I enjoyed the sensuality and self-awareness at the beginning. The explicit action in the middle part lost me, however. It felt like cold hard water. I saw Jim and Mark as one-dimensional predators. As for Liz, I found her incredibly passive and reactive. I'd like to know how she feels about being touched and even "tasted", but she is too "tipsy" to feel anything assertive or complex.

The second time I read it, I was prepared for the explicit material and I almost came to enjoy it! Delete "almost". What first seemed like predation now seems more like worship. How does Liz feel about being the object of worship? I still want her to be much more assertive, however. She is kissed repeatedly, but I notice that she never kisses back. She should become more like the woman in the bar!

I'd also like to see the worship spread out over a much longer time period. Add some coffee breaks! Have the characters dress and then undress several times! -- with clothes being ripped off at the end! And tell us more about Jim and Mark. How are they affected by this opportunity to worship Liz? How does she change -- ruin?! -- their lives? It might be better to introduce them one at a time, with the fantasy of drawing many others into the circle.

 

These are good points. I will address them individually.

Yes Liz is very reactive and not assertive at all at the beginning. That is deliberate. Because by the end she is enjoying herself and feels in charge. She’s owning her sexuality. I’m showing the “evolution” of her sexual self.

I did want it to come across like they were worshipping her. They weren’t preying on her or taking advantage. They were giving her just as much pleasure and they were receiving.

Yes it’s pretty explicit in the middle lol. I like raunchy. And I like to keep the stories short. I wouldn’t classify myself as an author. I just jot down what I myself find arousing. Most of my stories are based on experiences I’ve had or want to have.

Thanks for taking the time to read it ☺️

 

Too tame

 

This story is awesome